Shadow of spring day.
Rosebud perks gladly wistful.
Birds chirp in the sky.
This is my first attempt at a haiku!
Submitted as part of Jingle’s Poetry Potluck-Journey and Road Ahead
January 10, 2011 at 2:37 am
I haven’t tried my hand at haiku. Seems to me you’ve captured a nice moment here.
January 10, 2011 at 3:43 pm
Thanks, I was really nervous presenting this haiku since I’ve never really done one before. Glad you enjoyed!
January 10, 2011 at 3:07 am
you did well..
January 10, 2011 at 3:44 pm
January 10, 2011 at 3:47 am
Wistful rosebuds. A lovely image.
January 10, 2011 at 3:46 pm
Thanks, I just wanted to convey a longing with this haiku. Nature wanting another day. Glad you enjoyed!
January 10, 2011 at 3:53 pm
Thank you! Roses are my favorite, so I had to include roses in my first haiku!
January 10, 2011 at 4:02 am
The haiku expresses the thought of a beautiful day. Well done.
January 10, 2011 at 3:55 pm
Thank you, that’s what I was hoping to capture!
January 10, 2011 at 4:17 am
First try? You did it masterfully!
January 10, 2011 at 3:56 pm
Yep, first try, thank you!
January 10, 2011 at 4:20 am
I love haiku…yours just BEAUTIFUL!!! Lovely to read your work again my friend oxox
January 10, 2011 at 3:58 pm
My friend, I have missed you! Thank you for the amazingly kind words, they are appreciated as always!
January 10, 2011 at 4:34 am
Lovely haiku – keep writing them 🙂
January 10, 2011 at 4:00 pm
Thank you, I will!
January 10, 2011 at 4:40 am
Congrats on you success with this very fun form. Now, bring on spring!
January 10, 2011 at 4:02 pm
Thank you, I agree, bring on spring!
January 10, 2011 at 5:07 am
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January 10, 2011 at 6:48 am
its lovely eventhough its your firs attempt! i like it! here’s my new year potluck- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/03/15/life/
January 10, 2011 at 4:07 pm
Thanks, I am glad you enjoyed reading!
January 10, 2011 at 11:50 am
Well written but I have a query.
Why should nature be wistful?
Nature is lot more pleasant.
I prefer to look for smiles in buds and flowers.
Wistfulness of mind need to be lessened by nature’s lessons.
January 10, 2011 at 4:09 pm
I guess I chose wistful because of being in the shadow of a day. Meaning, the rosebuds were longing for the light to return. They know it will return so they are “gladly” wistful. Thanks for reading!
January 10, 2011 at 10:20 pm
Peace and natural beauty fill this perfect haiku. Thanks for sharing. 🙂
January 11, 2011 at 12:25 am
Wow, I am so happy you feel that way! Thanks for reading!
January 10, 2011 at 11:43 pm
A lovely haiku you have written.
January 11, 2011 at 12:28 am
Thank you for your kindness!
January 11, 2011 at 2:53 pm
Nice traditional haiku here – seldom see trad ones these days… think it would be even better without caps, without the full stops/periods (minimum punctuation is good), and a dash after line two, indicating the change/cutting/a-ha moment (subtle tho’ it is in this one). Great first haiku!
shadow of spring day
rosebud perks gladly wistful –
birds chirp in the sky
January 11, 2011 at 2:59 pm
Thank you for all your help Luke! As you know I was a bit nervous about my first try at a haiku. I am so very happy you liked it! I will keep your puncuation tips in mind for the next time I write a haiku. Thanks again, you are the best! 🙂
January 11, 2011 at 3:12 pm
you’re welcome 🙂
January 12, 2011 at 4:03 pm
I love the budding of Spring in your haiku very much…
January 12, 2011 at 5:28 pm
Thank you so much! It was my first try at a traditional haiku, glad you enjoyed it!
January 12, 2011 at 8:23 pm
WOW.. loved the ‘gladly wistful’ bit! Such a paradox… really cleverly used in this sweet haiku!
Well played, Nicole…
January 13, 2011 at 1:20 am
Wow, thank you! This was my first try at writing a traditional haiku, I am glad you think so highly of it!
January 16, 2011 at 2:44 pm
and along came the perfect poet award week 37… congrats! 🙂
January 16, 2011 at 3:20 pm
Thanks for the congrats!
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